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HI, I am going to introduce one of the amazing places in Busan which is called Oncheon Stream. 

This has been so popular among Busaners and now, 

I want this place to be more dynamic with many foreign travellers. 

I sometimes go there to jog along the stream as there are also a lot of people jogging and using exercising machines that are located nearby. 

There are also ducks living in that stream. 

As you can see on the pictures above, they are so cute! 

In addition, there are many places to go and take a rest and a lot of these places look so traditional.

Why don't you drop by here once you come to Busan?